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Etiquite and Redemption I by deathshadow1991 Etiquite and Redemption I by deathshadow1991
The first page of my comic for the Equestria Daily drawing competition, took me a while to get started I know but I finally hit a good idea so hopefully I'll finish in time. Wish me luck everypony because this is gonna be a 10 day race against the clock.

Ponies: Hasbro and Faust
Art: Me

Edit: Chao: Starlight, what does the counter say about the views
Starlight: it's... it's... IT'S OVER 9000!!!!!!!

Thank you everyone for finally letting me be able to do that ^^

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:iconomny87:
The only suggestions I can make is with the dialogue, especially Octavia's. Maybe make her text a bit bigger and/or darker so its easier to read, and scoot the text box in the third panel away from the edge of the panel so the words aren't squished up against the edge, or else have the word bubble overlap the panel completely. I mean, I can still read it, but it's distracting.
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:icondeathshadow1991:
Well this was my first comic with actual dialogue, that plus I typically fail at english makes this to be an expected problem, next time I'll try and get a prereader or something, thanks for the suggestions though
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:iconrainyrag:
RainyRag Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
TL;DR
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:icondeathshadow1991:
I didn't think it was that long, but it's alright that you think so
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:iconyoshiart24:
YoshiArt24 Dec 31, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Octavia:You had to be escorted out by the Royal Guards...
DJ PON-3:Hehehe...good times.
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:icondeathshadow1991:
I was thinking of one of my friends when I wrote this joke XD
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:iconyoshiart24:
YoshiArt24 Jan 5, 2012  Student Digital Artist
lol.Rofl
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:iconnomnomzombie17:
NomNomZombie17 Dec 28, 2011  Student Artist
Page 1: You're here

I love this you are amazing and would be 20% more amazing if you would fix that grammatical error.
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:icondeathshadow1991:
sorry about that, grammar is not my strong suit, thanks for the compliment though ^^
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:iconnomnomzombie17:
NomNomZombie17 Dec 30, 2011  Student Artist
It is a very common mistake so don't sweat it. You are quite welcome and I love this series. I wish I could get my stories out but I don't have any help.
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